Red Writing Hood Prompt

Today I am doing something a little different: I am participating in an exercise from Write on Edge.  We were instructed to tell a story in 500 words or less to accompany the prompt, "Two men appeared out of nowhere, a few yards apart in the narrow, moonlit lane."  The following is part memoir, part fiction.  What do you think?

Two men appeared out of nowhere, a few yards apart in the narrow, moonlit lane.  I stopped walking and drew my breath in sharply.  Normally when I left the library after dark I called Campus Security to request a ride home in one of their vans, but tonight I just wanted to get some fresh air after spending so much time studying for my upcoming exam.

I heard cars whizzing by on Archer Road and saw the flashes from their headlights as they passed by on the other side of the trees that stood fifty yards to my left. 

I edged my way toward the road in the off chance the men hadn’t seen me on the path.  They looked at each other and, with a silent nod of understanding, started to walk toward me. 

My heart raced as I picked up my pace and cut across the grass toward the trees that lined the sidewalk along the busy street.  I heard the pounding of their feet on the ground as they inched closer to me.  I held my breath as one of them touched my elbow and spoke softly into my ear.

“Hey there, beautiful.  We’re lost, can you tell us how to get back to the interstate?”

“My, my, you sure do have some creamy white thighs,” the other thug said as his eyes scanned my body.

The men stood on either side of me, so close I could feel the heat emanating from their bodies.

“Yeah, you got any girlfriends we could meet?  Do all ya’ll Gainesville gals look so good?” the first one said while switching a toothpick back and forth in his mouth and nodding his head.

“Mmmmhmmm, I just love Florida girls.  All blond and tan.  C’mon, honey, show us your pretty smile, too.”  The man grinned down at me with his tobacco stained teeth.

I darted my eyes back and forth trying to decide what to do next.  My knees shook and I began to sweat profusely.  Suddenly I heard laughter.  I stole a glance behind me and saw a group of fraternity guys walking toward us on the sidewalk.  The two men looked at each other as I scanned the crowd of guys to see if I recognized anyone.  Immediately I recognized my friend, Neil, in the group.  As the boys approached us, he called out to me.  My would-be abductors ran off into the trees, quickly vanishing into the blackness of the night.

As we walked back to my dorm, I told Neil what happened.  I thanked Neil and the rest of the guys for safely escorting me back home and ran upstairs to take a long, hot shower.